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PunkPrincess
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*you can fall from the sky*you can fall from a tree*but the best way to fall*is in love with me*
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|  | my poem- Dream or Reality-Tell me what you think
« Thread Started on Jul 9, 2004, 5:39pm » | ![[Quote]](http://s4.images.proboards.com/buttons/quote.gif) |
All my feelings
Do you really care
Is this just a dream
Or are you really there
Its too good to be true
Or is it just me
Is it all just in my head
Or is reality really what i see
It all happened so fast
So is it really gonna last
I really do like you
I just dont wanna get hurt
Its happened to me before
And in the end my heart was burnt
Im scared to fall in love
Im scared you'll break my heart
Im scared that if you do
My world will fall appart
plz reply bak and tell me what you think of it. thanx
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*you can fall from the sky,you can fall from a tree, but the best way to fall, is in love with me*
*im scared to fall in love, im scared you'll break my heart,im scared that if you do,my world will fall apart*
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Lori Maynard
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| | Re: my poem- Dream or Reality-Tell me what you thi
« Reply #1 on Jul 9, 2004, 5:49pm » | |
Nice rhythm and I like how you repeat in
"Im scared to fall in love
Im scared you'll break my heart
Im scared that if you do
My world will fall appart"
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Ted
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| | Re: my poem- Dream or Reality-Tell me what you thi
« Reply #2 on Jul 10, 2004, 5:21pm » | |
PunkPrincess,
I enjoyed the honest, transparent thoughts that go through your head as you ponder whether a love is indeed true. Your poem should be timed just right for many out there with the same question. Our dream world is sometimes a standard we compare the real world to. If only we could know the ending and truly risk our feelings for that great prize of an honest, enduring relationship! Good work!
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martytr
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| | Re: my poem- Dream or Reality-Tell me what you thi
« Reply #3 on Nov 23, 2004, 5:21pm » | |
I liked your poem. It seems as if you are really in a search.
Martytr
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